Poem in the Works: “Unraveling”/part 3

I am working on a poem and not waiting until it’s finished to share it. It’s a very different experience for me. Energizing. Maybe I’m more of a risk-taker than I think. Maybe it’s just that my readers are a safe bunch. Maybe both.

…Nightly I picked up the needles.

Kitchen tidy, everything
the appearance of order.
It was then
heart and mind
tip-tapped along together
knitting the details
of all that had happened.

I had not anticipated,
not allowed to slip in,
that I’d be carrying along
on the back
the bobbin of estrangement
every row
every stitch.

Cables emerged,
twisting and turning.
so many my eye could not discern
where a braid began,
where it was heading
or how we’d come to this point,
until the weight was more than I could carry
and I had to put it down…..

concludes HERE

In case you missed them:
Poem in the Works: “Unraveling”/part 1
Poem in the Works: “Unraveling”/part 2

About Marilyn

Reading, thinking, listening, writing and talking about faith, creativity, ESL for refugees, grief and finding the story in a story. Student of Spanish. Foe of procrastination. Cheez-it fan. People person with hermit tendencies or vice-versa. Thank you so much for reading.
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5 Responses to Poem in the Works: “Unraveling”/part 3

  1. juliana says:

    I just went back and read them all together – this is hard beauty.

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    • Marilyn says:

      Hmmm. “Hard beauty”……I’m going to think about that, Juliana. Thank you for reading and for going back and for sharing that phrase!


      • juliana says:

        I read them all together and they are beautiful…and hard. I hear pain and heaviness. I also hear beauty.

        We had Dr. Curt Thompson come for a weekend conference at church and he preached today. He’s a psychiatrist and a neuroscientist and a lover and seeker of Jesus – his specialty is shame and its impact.

        He preached on Psalm 27 – and something he said struck me and that I’m still allowing to marinate. It’s that God sees beauty in us – that we are the most beautiful thing He’s seen. Evil (always with a capital E as he uses it) uses Shame to devour us; Shame or the voices in our head that are devouring us.

        I think that is what I hear in your poem – Beauty wining over Evil’s attempts to devour. A hard (or difficult) beauty.

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